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Let's burn the bodies of the young,
And beautiful.
Collect them all into a pile,
To drown in acid tears,
And bitter hatred of the self.
Let's bury them by the sidewalks,
Where we face our daily battles,
To the war their beauty is a weapon of,
And defence our insecurities bide us.

Let's smash and break the armor,
Of the cars and vehicles which congest our air;
Of the perfect specimen of science,
To which our drunken ignorance blindly drives along.
Let's throw matches in the petrol tank,
And watch the lack of free will go up in flames;
Destroy fundamental retardedness,
Of the people who have forgotten how to walk.

Let's put taxes on street corners,
And place a toll on our back alleys,
So the whores and the junkies can continue their employment,
When servicing our police and politians.
Let's replace prisons with government;
For they enter our homes,
And put prices on our living anyway.
They rape us of our power,
And abuse the children that become the future;
Then they deal us the drugs and alcohol,
To destroy the brain's acknowledgement to the deceit,
And weaken our resistance.

Let's build bridges over water,
To only burn them when we cross them;
So then we have nothing to go back to,
And not even our naivety can tell us otherwise.
Let's create a religion,
Where nobody dies.
Instead of pursuiting our nirvana,
We create a land where we're all equal states of mind,
And we celebrate the way we live,
So not to condemn it.
Let's not have a ruler;
A leader,
To worship,
Or to obey.
Instead, work together to exhibition our thoughts,
And ideals for prosperity.

Let's strip man of his suit;
Of his power,
And leave him naked to manipulation,
Of corporate demon's.
Let's graffiti the signs and logo's,
Of emblems of embelishment,
And stand proudly on the soapbox,
Screaming:
"Let's!"
©2003-2009 ~affirmation
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Author's Comments

This is one of my best poems in a while; I'm taking an abstract purging stand as of late. I could write a thousand poems about the same pain and let people comment and love them, but I'm trying something new for myself. I'm looking for a new start..

Hope you enjoy.

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:iconsixhours:
Absolutely love the title... I think you could conceivably get rid of the semi-colon in the second to last line... other than that, I love it. Let's!
:iconyellowbelliedworm:
my god, this is an incredible piece of writing. you captured my thoughts precisely. Thank you.

email me if you'd like : theaterchick86@aol.com
:iconobsidiantear:
You've got a way to weave them words hun... Let's.

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You only get to see bits and pieces of me
:iconadagiobreezes:
This is really good. It reminds me of that feeling of desperation and desire for action and revolution in a world that seems to be going down hill on a far too consitent basis. It sort of reminds me of the way I used to feel in high school, too. I thought I could change the world. Silly me.
:iconaural-autumn:
amazing anti-war and anti-american government poem. the title is simple and that is best, because it was almost the whole point of the poem, to stand and agree on doing all the wonderful things that you spoke of at the end. you descibe things perfect with words that the feeble would never understand.

"Let's not have a ruler;
A leader,
To worship,
Or to obey.
Instead, work together to exhibition our thoughts,
And ideals for prosperity."

we can make this posible when the elections come in 2004. we can prevent Bush and his war-mongers from hijacking this country and trying to take over the world. Iraq has been taken, and afghanistan and columbia. syria is next...if we don't keep protesting and working for this common cause.

good work...Tif


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"Success aint only based on self esteem, it takes a sense to differentiate between yours and someone else's dreams..."
"What don't kill will just make me crazier."

-Eyedea and Abilities
:icondangeroustoy:
Sadly the ideal world can't exist..... if it isn't corporations and government taking advantage it's religious leaders or warlords, it's mans nature to dominate and be dominated besides that the average person never has thought indepndently (darkages??).... anyhoo i'm of my soapbox now Blush

I like it it has so much anger and frustration in their, the final 3 lines really say a lot too, though that could just be my frustration with people that protest in gnorance (don't get me wrong many have a valid point, but when someone is screaming slogans and is confronted and can't explain their motives.... u know just being part of a crowd it really Poo me off..... hmmm whoops i'm back on the soap box again frustrated )... anyway it's very well written... bravo Clap
:iconsto67:
maaaaaad stuff
great poem for a new beginning
id agree that this is your best as of late
its very motivated and emotional while being detached
it states your frame of mind so clearly
length is just right
wording is near perfect
anarchy is a wonderful thing
not much i can criticise about it
beautiful poem
however
the one thing that sort of strikes me in this is that
it somehow sounds slightly fake
but it might just be the detachment and its just my opinion
because it doesn't feel as strong as it could be
but thats the only thing i could pick up on
very minor and i almost overlooked it if i didnt read it a few times
overall one of the best ive seen from you
more experiences = more variety of poems
im getting there.. slowly hehe
keep it up! :D (Big Grin)
:iconshallowinnocence:
there should be a "really like deviation" option on this....awesome poem...just...wow. now i am incredibly honored to have had u comment on my own, obviously inferior poetry....i think....yes +Fav :D (Big Grin)
:iconevad:
The crowd, "mob" mentality that gathers here reminds me of some scenes of The Wall. It has a driving force and voice. It's kind of cliche though, not really abstract in concept or imagery at all.

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:iconniceboyjs:
Clap Very good in my opinion, you seem to be able to address things like you addressed in your writing very well, keep up the good work!

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